A Stone's Throw in Nong Khai

By : Icarus
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The night train leaving Bangkok winds so slowly through conglomerate bidonville and the vagrant beauty of suburban stations.

If, for me this trip were a state imposed chore, Kit, aged 7, felt the simple excitement of the upper bunk and other curious passengers. I remember a younger child who cried much before he amused her and us eating inconsequential snacks, sleeping till the morning clatter, then Udon

From there to Nong Khai always seems a ‘rails and platforms’ afterthought, the real journey already completed, only this epilogue to negotiate. Carrying goods, and a few passengers, past shaggy scrub, or fishermen immersed in fetid pools, and the occasional buffalo wallow.

The final station is modern and underused to a fault. I usually shower there through the battered wash room turnstile and we did so this time, seeing most of the falang head raggedly and perhaps apprehensive to the border. We joined them later, clean, and fed by the stalls raked jauntily opposite the concourse.

Back within the hour, free to wait for the return train that evening and rent a motorbike from the German run café on the main street running alongside the Mekong.

Veterans of two wheels, staying faithful to the river, until on the right the gaudy colours of a Wat, I turned into the compound on impulse.

The lithe orange novices were burning debris; brush, rubbish, tired bunting even, which made the ubiquitous stark dried white mud untidy. Kit was intrigued and we formally dismounted.

Party tomorrow they told us infectiously. We drifted toward the water’s edge, suddenly so steeply sloping as to be almost terraced. Exuberant lumber floated below, jostling the shore though we hardly saw the small indigenous figure squatting there too.

What possessed him to start hurling stones?

Mortification as one struck and I entertained the banality of tragedy.

 

Five years on a gentler child you would go far to find. While remorsefully, we sometimes recall that day of fickle consequence and banquet circumstance.

 

© Icarus. All rights reserved by the author.


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Dana
March 22, 2008, 02:07

" . . . fickle consequence and banquet circumstance."

Fantastic, but . . . what does it mean? I am always suspicious of the person who seems ten times smarter than me. Maybe he is only three times smarter. But the result is the same. I can never really be sure whether I have been left behind, or whether I was crediting a mirage with reality. Poetry and poem like lean prose can seduce with meaning that is not there.

" . . . fickle consequence and banquet circumstance." Fantastic . . . but what does that mean?


chuckwoww
March 22, 2008, 11:27


" . . . fickle consequence and banquet circumstance."

I'm not sure what it means either but it seems to describe Icarus' writing.
Marc Holt
March 22, 2008, 12:43

What does it mean? Read the title. Read the story again. The kid threw a rock at the people hardly seen shepherding the lumber down the river...exuberantly too!

Welcome back Icarus. Another nice piece of prose, but perhaps you could ease up on the adjectives a little in future. Why use 'formally dismounted' when 'dismounted' would have been just as good? Or 'exuberant lumber', or 'banquet circumstance'? The adjectives just don't do justice to the rest of the story. Despite this, it's good to see you back and writing again. More, please.
Dana
March 22, 2008, 22:01

I agree with Mr. Holt regarding adjectives. The example that just stopped me in my reading tracks was 'exuberant lumber'. I know I will never read that again in my life, and I am not convinced I should have seen it in the first place.

Possibly Mr. Holt and I do not have ideas that exhibit merit because we are not bright enough. Unfortunately that is not an idea that can be argued one way or the other because the argument is circular. After all, if we are not bright enough; then, we are not bright enough.

I find myself riding Mr. Holt's horse here. I love lean prose and sometimes try to write that way myself. But it is sometimes a difficult thing to do. This reminds me of those 'one hand clapping' examples of Zen thought that we all heard in college and that we all nodded our heads at and smiled at. Guess what? It was all nonsense. None of it made any sense.

Lean prose, a thing of beauty; but hard to do. I love your writing.
Persil
April 24, 2008, 11:18

Yes, welcome back Icarus. For a brief few months I thought you'd succumbed to Mr Dana's harping. I thought you'd picked up your ball and gone home. Not so.

I've made the train journey a couple of times ( in fact, I dropped off my spouse a few days ago at HuaLampong station to do just that journey), and spent times around Nong Kai. You caught the right tone for me.


As for adjectives, I'm neither a wordsmith nor a critic, merely a reader. Most of your adjectives seem very appropriate:
vagrant beauty
shaggy scrub
fetid pools
gaudy colours
tired bunting
ubiquitous stark dried white mud
all produce just the accurate memory of these sights for me.

Exuberant lumber, I see big logs of probably illegally felled tropic hardwood, glistening dark reddish brown, bobbing up and down in the Mekong. But your two word take less space, yet evoke the same memory.

"fickle consequence and banquet circumstance" are not my experience, since I wasn't there that day. But if that is your flavour of that memory, you're entitled to describe it that way, no matter what some other great genius artists on this site may say.

Dana
April 24, 2008, 13:11

",no matter what some other great genius artists on this site may say."

Maybe a little rough. Talking about writing is going to involve different opinions. Done with a good heart and monitered competently by the website administrator it can be an exercise of value.

I spent a lot of time on 'exuberant lumber' and when I finally was imagining logs dancing and singing like cartoon characters I decided I had spent enough time.

Tropical hardwoods do not sing and dance.

But to credit Mr. Icarus: his writing makes us think and that is a good thing. The older I get the slower I read, and the more critically and precisely I read. Icarus is good for me.
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