No Further Action

By : Icarus
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The linoleum on the floor was sweated clean and the walls antiseptic green. We had sat a long time in the car before coming in.

It was just another part of return. An onset of responsibility.

My gay brother had been very good in all this. He seemed to know there were a series of things to be got through in the velvet glove.

There seemed little point in trying to explain much to anyone. How there was a paradigm shift in the sky above the airport which wasn’t just to do with the heat. That a kind of beauty was unleashed in the Kingdom. That nobody was safe.

‘Which one of you is the patient’? she had asked.

I watched the blood froth red into the syringe. This nurse’s uniform was audible when she moved and while not old, her hard strained face summed up a whole nasty part of the occidental thing.

See you again said the doctor cheerily as we left, though I couldn’t work out how he was so sure.

The next days passed slowly.

My wife and I lunched mostly in country pubs speaking in muted tones. She had not yet given up asking why and I countered with a list of symptoms.

Though, as luck would have it, the call from my brother came through while we were in a noodle bar deep inside the Thai supermarket at the end of our road.

‘No further action.’

They had texted him, for he had been cowardly impersonated.

 

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mike
May 12, 2007, 23:37

Glad to see the 'no further action' report. Must have been a relief.
Dana
May 13, 2007, 00:29

I found this a demanding presentation piece. I kinda wished there had been an extra sentance between every other sentance. I had to summon up reserves I use when reading poetry. It finally won me over and it was nice to be required to really read. I read the story several times and it never got easier. Finally decided that was the way it was supposed to be. My reading skills are very high so for some people this must have been a North Face of Everest climb. I hope everybody made it to the top.
chuckwoww
May 13, 2007, 02:22

I agree with Dana. It's a prose poem. I like when things are stripped to the essentials but it does need a bit of work on the reader's part. Worth the effort though.
Ikkrang
May 14, 2007, 04:33

Yes, reading this at first is a challenge, but it grows on you re-reading it.

welcome back to life.

Please continue.
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