Virgin

Rob
July 1, 2008, 02:05

Icarus, not a prose poem, but a poem and a very nice one. I like the way it builds up to that telling last line.

korski
July 1, 2008, 07:05

Notes for a story.

Victor
July 3, 2008, 05:05

Reminds me of Charles Bukowski

Marc Holt
July 4, 2008, 10:01

You held hands for 5 months? No wonder she lost interest!

Nice poem though.

Dana
July 4, 2008, 10:40

"You held hands for 5 months? No wonder she lost interest!"

At the risk of being seen in the wrong crowd I must agree with Mr. Holt. The only and unimprovable advice I ever got about being successful with women was "Put your hands on them. It is what they want."

Ever seen an ugly guy with a beautiful woman and wondered about it? His hands are on her. Your hands are not on her.

chuckwoww
July 4, 2008, 20:42

In Icarus defense let me say that sometimes these matters can't be rushed. I don't think they literally held hands for 5 months, that would tend to limit normal day to day activities. Perhaps it just took that long to decide whether to move the relationship on to a more physical level.

Dana
July 5, 2008, 06:25

Well, all of the posters here in the comment section are right. But wouldn't it be interesting if we could somehow calculate how many years of time have been wasted in the last 10,000 years 'respecting' women? Put your hands on her. That is what she wants.

chuckwoww
July 5, 2008, 08:05

I think Dana what we have here is a case of the customer being cautious. He suspected the lady might turn out to be unresponsive...and he was right.

chuckwoww
July 5, 2008, 08:28

As for your point, I must stop revising my comments, about women wanting our hands on them...yes of course they do, but they like to know the hands are clean, well manicured, and not attached to stranglers.

Dana
July 5, 2008, 09:20

"As for your point, I must stop revising my comments, about women wanting our hands on them...yes of course they do, but they like to know the hands are clean, well manicured, and not attached to stranglers."

Really? Next you will be telling me that the sex act is not really just polite rape. Anyway, I do not know what country you live in; but in the United States everytime a disgusting piece of violent antisocial ugly human garbage escapes from prison they always find him in a motel room WITH A WOMAN. What is the attraction for the woman? He puts his hands on her.

Right now as I type these words millions of sex starved and lonely women are lying in bed reading Romance novels. What two things do all of the male characters in these wish books have? Number one they are tall. No woman dreams about being raped (excuse me, I mean having sexual relationships with) by a short man. Number two the male characters don't waste any time putting their hands on the women.

Not too often but sometimes I get some younger stronger taller handsomer man than me asking what I do to be 'successful' with women. These shy little boys in big mens' bodies simply can not put their hands on women. Women have programmed biological needs but nothing can happen or satisfy until they are 'connected' to a male. Think of it as two contact points that must be connected for electricity to happen. Women know this. Most men are stupid.

Persil
July 6, 2008, 16:28

Korski >Notes for a story.<

I think not. I think this is the story. icarus is simply perfecting his minimalism.

>We had held hands 5 months long.<

All this kerfuffle about this opening line. I think there maybe a simple answer nobody thought of.

Nice stuff, Icarus.